Story time: Not our problem

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Charming cottage - Reeuwijk May 2019

“Mom, who are those kids in the bathroom?” asked Gracie in her sweet 5-year-old voice.

Mary looked quizzically at her child knowing that she has a great imagination. She didn’t want to ridicule her daughter, although she knew that no one else was in the house.
“Gracie” she responded, “I do not know – please tell me about them.”

“Mom, there are 2 girls and 1 boy. The girl in the dress has a teddy bear,” explained Gracie as she tugged at her mother’s arm, pulling her towards the bathroom.

Upon arriving at the bathroom door, Gracie stopped and began to point, “There they are Mom. Why are they ignoring us?”

Mary could not see the 3 children. Gracie then added,
“They never speak to me. They never play with me. They are not nice.”

Mary said to Gracie, “I do not know why they are here. Since they are not nice, I will ask them to go to their homes.”
Gracie smiled and nodded in agreement with her mother.
“Let’s brush your teeth, then you can go to bed and have sweet dreams.”
The child seemed happy and comforted by her mother.

After putting Gracie to bed, Mary wondered how she would tell this story to her husband, Carl. They moved to this new house 7 months ago and for the last 3 months Mary’s been uncomfortable in their new abode. She’s been hearing sounds in the ceiling at nights. It’s so unnerving! It’s been so audible that Mary expected Carl to say something, but he hasn’t. When the sounds began, Mary had a roof repairman check for any openings in the roof and the surrounding soffit. The cottage is only 2 years old; everything was perfect. She wondered if it was all in her head. However, now that Gracie is seeing “potential ghosts”, Carl needed to know.

Later that evening when Carl arrived home, Mary decided not to tell him. Her husband seemed tired and stressed after work. Mary did not want to bother him. He is a very rational man. She could already anticipate Carl’s reaction whilst shaking his head and saying,
“Mary, little Gracie has an imaginary friend. How can you possibly encourage this madness?”

The next day, Mary could hear Gracie speaking to someone. She went to her room only to hear Gracie say,
“Why won’t you speak to me? Is that old lady your Grandma?”

That night Mary could not sleep. She was concerned about Gracie although the child didn’t seem scared. Nevertheless, their home felt spooky. Just passed midnight the sounds started again. It was not discreet. The stomp above was very clear. It was too pronounced to be a rat or racoon. It was as though someone was walking heavily overhead.

Mary thought about waking Carl as the noise above grew louder and louder. She turned on the bedside lamp, looked over at Carl in the bed and realized that his eyes were open. She asked him the obvious, “Carl, are you awake?”
He turned towards her and grumbled, “Yes, I’m not so tired.”
Mary was suspicious as now wasn’t the time for half-truths.
Suddenly there was a loud thud above. She asked,
“Did you hear that?”
“Yes, I did,” replied Carl as he sat up in bed.
Mary sighed with relief as now she could divulge everything.
“I’m glad you heard it too. I thought I was going crazy. I’ve been hearing sounds for a while now but always after falling asleep. At first I thought I was dreaming but it’s the same when I stay awake past midnight.”
Carl drew Mary close to him and said,
“I am sorry we didn’t speak about this before. I didn’t want to scare you as this is definitely not normal.”

Mary then relayed the stories about Gracie and the “invisible visitors”. Carl then said,
“One morning after getting dressed for work, I heard children’s laughter in the bathroom while walking out. Reflexively, I turned around. Of course, there was no one there. Although, it didn’t sound like Gracie – I checked on her and she was fast asleep. I got the heebie-jeebies and kept thinking about it.”
In spite of the story, Mary still asked,
“Have you ever seen them?”
“No!” exclaimed Carl. “I wanted to know more, so I jokingly asked Mark about ghosts, and he said,

children see spirits – adults drink them.

He was kidding but he did say that children are sensitive and can see them better than us.”

Mark, Carl’s best friend, was always fascinated with the occult and telling ghost stories. They were a source of entertainment at parties. No one believed them especially Carl, who always teased his friend. However, lying in bed huddled together – was no laughing matter. Carl decided to have a serious talk with his friend.

When Carl spoke to Mark, he was very excited and willing to help. He had learnt about exorcism but had never practiced it. Mark was eager to perform his first one - to expel all evil or lingering spirits from his friend’s home. Mary took Gracie to her mother’s place for the weekend. Mark arrived that night with his Bible, a potpourri of incense and wearing an amulet. He placed one around Carl’s neck. They lit the potpourri, placing small bowls in all corners of the house. A minute before midnight, they began to pray. Immediately thereafter stomping could be heard in the ceiling. They might have angered the spirits because the noise from above became louder.

Mark sat crossed legged on the floor and start to chant; his body rocked back and forth. Carl watched intensely and was surprised about this side of his jovial friend. Mark then took the Bible and started to read from the book of Psalms. Straight away a banging reverberated throughout the house. Carl became frightened and began to tremble. Mark tried to reassure his friend by saying,
“It’s working Carl – our efforts are making an impact.”
In a flash, the lights went out. Carl tried flipping light switches but the house remained in darkness. He said,
“I’m having cold feet. I can’t handle this anymore. I’m leaving.”
“I understand but now that I’ve started the exorcism, I must finish,” explained Mark.
Carl picked up his car keys and left. A few minutes after Carl drove away, all the sounds ceased and the lights went on. Mark was puzzled. He finished his chanting then left.

Carl joined Mary and Gracie at his mother-in-law’s home. Later Mark called to tell them what happened, but he could give no guarantees. The couple were too afraid to return to the house. Instead, they called the landlord, John, to request a meeting.

John was a surly no-nonsense man who seemed very unfriendly. However, the following day when he opened his door to greet the couple, he gave them a knowing smile. After relaying their experiences, John remarked,
“I already guessed that this was the reason for your urgent visit. The prior tenants had similar issues.”

Mary and Carl glared at John without saying a word. They had rented a haunted house! John sensed some resentment and said,
“Paranormal encounters are personal experiences so this is not something I would tell a tenant.”
Clearly, he had no answers for them; instead he seemed delighted as he explained,
“As a boy, I lived at the location of your home.”
“Was your family home there?” Mary asked.
“No, my orphanage.”
Mary and Carl gasped audibly.
John continued, “Smith’s Orphanage. Miss Smith was a spinster and mother to all her orphans. I have happy memories growing up there from about 6 until I was fostered at 14. Every orphan was my sibling and like any other family – we had laughter, fights and tears too when someone died.” John looked so happy as he told the story.

Carl was quiet but Mary had another question.
“Did many children die there?
“Yes – many did because the children that came to Miss Smith were often rejected elsewhere because they were so sickly. I didn’t always look like this!”, chuckled the landlord.

John further explained that when the orphanage fell into disrepair, he bought the property, demolished the old house and built the current house.

Mary delved deeper. She asked,
“Did Miss Smith die in the house?”
“Yes. It was her beloved home. When she became old, the city stopped the orphanage although her niece wanted to continue it. She was very distressed by this decision.”

Finally, Carl asked a question,
“Have you heard the horribly disconcerting stomping in the ceiling at nights?”
“No. After the prior tenants left, I slept there for 1 week and heard nothing. Actually, I slept like a baby. The noise you experienced was not a problem for me,” John quipped.
Irritated Carl then said, “I’ve not slept well for the last 3 months. I am tired. We cannot live like this. We will move out!”

John reminded the couple that their contract was for 1 year.
Carl retorted, “We do not care. We'll pay the rent. We are leaving. Your haunted house will no longer be our problem.”


1.“children see spirits – adults drink them” ©MoMoGrOw


This is my response to The Ink Well's fiction prompt #107.


The photo is my own



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Love this story! Creepy and well written. I just rented an appartment for a year, luckily it's not haunted ;^)

P.S. I couldn't help but notice that the house on the picture is located in Reeuwijk. I am from Gouda, born and raised, and I have walked through Reeuwijk, around the Reeuwijkse plassen, many a times. I probably passed this house too.

Knuffel!

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I am happy to hear that you apartment is not haunted. However you should inform me after 4 months.
🤣 Just kidding I hope it isn't.
P.S. Aww you are from Gouda - that is lovely. You most definitely passed that cottage. I did a 7 km walk from the plassen to Reeuwijk. We went to Gouda as well. I have embedded the links from my posts years ago. I hope you will like my perspective of your neighborhood. Knuffel!

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I am happy to hear that you apartment is not haunted. However you should inform me after 4 months.

Hahaha! I like to think that I'm sensitive enough to feel it out in the first couple of nights ;<)

Nice to see your older posts about the city and environment that I grew up in.

Knuffel!

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Awww of course - with you @vincentnijman - I think you would find out immediately 😀

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:<)

I must admit though that I often feel like I can't breathe properly inside my apartment but that's something I experience with almost every house, building, classroom, office space and so on that I've been staying in in my life time.

I want to be outdoors, as often as possible, but that is - of course - only natural.
Human beings aren't meant to be boxed in/ caged, nor are animals.

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I understand- you last sentence summarized it well.

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Oh, MoMo. You got me hooked.

It's a good thing Carl and his family moved out quickly enough before things escalated, and then they would be tortured by fear.

I wonder, though, why the house stopped when the left the house during the exorcism by Mark.

This was a really good one. Thank you.

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Aww I am glad you were hooked as this is my first scary story.

The old lady wanted the orphanage to continue - so her spirit was most likely discontented with anything else.

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Scary story 🤧
Mark's bravery is extreme, I can't think of taking such rich. What if the spirits were aggressive, they would have descended on Mark.

The couple made the right choice

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I am happy it was scary - I wanted to ensure it was. Yes Mark was brave indeed. He finished the exorcism after Carl’s departure to ensure there were no repercussions.
Yes indeed the couple made the right choice.

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The story highlights the importance of communication and taking action when it comes to strange occurrences in the home, even if they may seem trivial or imagined at first. Nicely written 😁👍👍

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Thank you for your comment. Indeed you are correct communication is even more important when there are anomalies.
Thanks for dropping by.

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Brilliant setting and atmosphere. You created the perfect space for a haunting. Gracie’s parents’ are as confused as she is by the sounds and sightings. Your writing is engaging and eloquent.

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Many thanks for the compliments @itsostylish. I really appreciate your feedback as it is my first time writing anything scary.

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Spooky... All ghosty. This is an interesting piece. I love it.

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Many thanks - I am happy that you loved it. Thanks for your feedback.

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I am shivering right now as a I read through this spooky piece. It is we crafted and believable.
Great piece.

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Many thanks for your feedback. i am happy that you enjoy the story. Thanks for dropping by.

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It's good to read your stories again.
A haunted house, gave me chills. Here in my city there is a haunted house, according to legend; there lives the spirit of a girl who committed suicide when her boyfriend was murdered.

Since then, the people who live in that house say they have experienced paranormal situations. I liked your suspenseful story and the noises made by spirits. In the end they did the most sensible thing, move from that place.
Thanks for sharing.
Good day @momogrow

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Thank you for liking my first scary story - much appreciated.

Wow your story is even creepier as it is real life.

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I got goosebumps while reading this and would normally leave before finishing but your way of writing got me hooked to the end of the story😉 I wouldn't want to live in the house either😁

!LUV

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I am happy you did not leave. This is my first attempt at writing a scary story. I think it was effective since you had goosebumps. Thanks for the feedback.

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Creepy horror stories, but very interesting. I like the scary part.

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I am happy that you enjoyed my first ever creepy story. 😀 Thank you.

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I couldn't resist reading the whole story. As a huge fan of the supernatural, ghost, paranormal encounters, exorcism etc. this was thrilling. Good thing they left, cause sooner than later, their beloved daughter will get obsessed or even possessed with her new friends, prolly lead to a very nasty end. As always , brilliant writeup Momo, bravo💗

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Many thanks for your feedback. I really appreaciated it. This is my first scary fictional writing - the feedback including your has been encouraging.

I am happy you like the story - it was fun to go out of my comfort zone. Yes they needed to move otherwise - who knows what could happen.

Thanks for dropping by.

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I was tempted to stop reading along the line because it was scary. I don't know you as an author who creates such a scary story, momo. lol
But all the same, your story is thrilling. It kept me glued till the end. Mark is so courageous.
Brilliant entry, my dear

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I am happy your read to the end. You are right, this is my first scary morning. When I saw the prompt I was going to ignore it but then I decided to get out of my comfort zone. I m happy I did.

Thanks for the compliment and for dropping by.

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This a a scary horror story to me. Here in Africa if this scenes you described here are real - in most cases what people do is to take the easiest and fastest route which is packing out of that accursed house straight away without second thoughts and to be honest with you, houses like this truly exist over here but not many get to tell the story because terrible thing like paralysis, insanity and unexplainable sickness strike those who witness it.

Anyways what do I know? To me this was a really good frictional story. I enjoyed reading this one.

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Thank you - it was a scary horror story for me too. I needed to get out of my comfort zone and write it though. I am glad you liked it.
Different cultures handle these events differently. Maybe it is good that I have not encountered a spirit though - I am not sure what I would do.

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1.“children see spirits – adults drink them” ©MoMoGrOw

hehe, I have never seen this line before, but it sure is a funny one. You had a great interpretation of the prompt.

It was an amazing thriller story. I was really thinking the ghost will attack them during the exorcism lolz.

I doubt anyone would want to stay in that house even though the ghosts aren't diabolical. I'm sure it could also mess with their daughter's mental health. The dad made the right decision.

!PIZZA !LUV

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You have never seen that quote before because I made it up. I liked it - that is why I placed ©MoMoGrOw to copyright it.

Thanks for enjoying my first creepy story. It was fun to write.
Yes I think the family’s mental health would surely have been affected. It was better to leave.

Thanks for the tips.

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wow, you made it. That's even more amazing.

You're welcome 🙂

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Wow! You are really good in making stories. Honestly I don't like to watch horror movies because I am afraid to dream about it at night but I was able to read your story from beginning to the end.

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Aww many thanks for your feedback. I am like you - I do not like any thing scary. This was my first attempt at a scary story to get out of my comfort zone. I am really happy with the feedback. Thanks so much.

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Wow! Really. You're good at the first time how much more if you have been to it.

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Not sure why it took Carl up to three months to take action. I don't think I can bear a week.
I believe in the story of ghosts and spirits, that's why I would become really scared in this situation.
Really nice story as always, thanks.

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I am happy you like my first ghost story. I guess Carl and Mary were just stubborn and proud. Communication was clearly an issue between them. I do not think I could tolerate it for a week either. My peace of mind is important. 😀

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