Fiction: The child and his drawing/ El niño y su dibujo (ENG/ ESP)


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The child and his drawing

Esteban settled into an unoccupied seat facing the aisle. Next to him, by the window, was a couple and a child. He glanced uneasily at his wristwatch. The meeting was at 2:30 p.m. and the train was late: it should have left at 10 a.m. and was leaving at 12 noon. It was a 2-hour trip, he again nervously reminded himself. Hopefully, he would be on time. The train set off and he busied himself reading some documents he had in his briefcase to try to calm down.

He was not 20 minutes into the trip when he heard the couple next to him arguing. Out of the corner of his eye he looked at the man who spoke in a threatening tone: he was an older, gray-haired, well-dressed man. His eyebrows arched in irony and anger. The woman next to him was younger than him, although not that much younger, and she remained silent with her face down, looking at her pale, bony hands.

Esteban remembered the many fights with Sandra, his wife. His obligations, the long hours at work, meant that every day a gulf opened up between him and her. For months now, they had spent few hours together, and when they did manage to get together, anything would cause them to quarrel. In fact, Sandra had talked about getting a divorce, but he had reminded her that there was Sarita, their 5-year-old daughter. With that excuse, they had managed to keep the conflict at bay.


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That memory made Esteban look for the boy who had come with the couple who were arguing. The boy was lying in the hallway and drawing a picture. Esteban watched him curiously because the boy seemed to be entertaining himself by drawing some strokes.

─What are you doing? -Esteban asked, trying not to let the boy hear his parents.

─I'm making a boat and the sea -answered the smiling boy taking some crayons out of his cardboard box. The colors were worn and had a thick tip, perhaps from so many drawings, from so much use.

─Do you like boats and the sea? Do you know the sea? -Esteban asked, trying to sound enthusiastic.

─I have never visited the sea, but my dad told me he would take me. When I grow up I'm going to be a pirate and I'm going to travel around the world on a ship," said the boy as he drew a smiling sun in yellow.

Next to Esteban, the couple was still arguing. He was tempted to reproach her, to let them know that the boy was near them and that maybe he could hear them, but he didn't feel moral enough to do so. He and Sandra had argued so much, anywhere, about anything, that at that moment Esteban was wondering if Sarita had ever heard him. It made him very sad to think that his daughter had heard them arguing.


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─What color is the sea? -asked the boy suddenly pulling Esteban out of his thoughts.

─Blue. But of various shades of blue: light, dark, intense," explained Esteban, but the boy looked at him as if he didn't understand. Then he took his box of crayons and took out two blue crayons.

─I only have these two. Which one do I use, the one in the sky? -─ asked the child with the colors in his little hands.

─Yes, use the one in the sky," pointed out Esteban with a smile. The boy began to fill in the entire bottom of the page with blue. Lines came and went, circles too, and as the color took up space, the boy's face brightened. When he finished with the sea, he began to color the upper part of the page, trying not to spoil the smiling sun he had drawn before.

When he finished coloring, the boy proudly showed Esteban his drawing.

─That's perfect! -Esteban exclaimed with joy. The boy stood up with the drawing in his hand and went to his parents to show it to them. The man and the woman applauded and hugged him, they also congratulated him for what he had done. Esteban saw how the man sat on the boy's lap and smiled listening to him. At that moment, apparently, the man and the woman had finished arguing.

Esteban sighed and looked at the time: time had flown by and they were about to arrive at their destination. He would be on time for the meeting, but now Esteban thought about how wise it would be to travel so far. Maybe he and Sandra should meet more, share more, argue less. As he got off the train and looked at the couple with their child, he thought he would have to talk to Sandra and that he would buy Sarita a box of crayons so that she could draw seas and blue skies, with smiling suns every day.

All images are free and the text is my own, translated in Deepl.

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El niño y su dibujo
Esteban se acomodó en un asiento desocupado que daba al pasillo. Al lado de él, junto a la ventana, estaba una pareja y un niño. Miró inquieto su reloj de pulsera. La reunión era a las 2:30 de la tarde y el tren estaba retrasado: debía haber salido a las 10 de la mañana y estaba saliendo a las 12 del mediodía. Eran 2 horas de viaje, recordó nuevamente nervioso. Con suerte, estaría llegando a tiempo. El tren se puso en marcha y él se ocupó en leer unos documentos que traía en su maletín de mano para tratar de calmarse.

No llevaba 20 minutos de viaje cuando escuchó que la pareja a su lado discutía. Con el rabillo del ojo miró al hombre que hablaba en un tono amenazante: era un hombre mayor, de cabello canoso y de buen vestir. Sus cejas se arqueaban en señal de ironía y enfado. La mujer a su lado era más joven que él, aunque no tanto y permanecía callada con la cara gacha, mirando sus manos pálidas y huesudas.
Esteban recordó las múltiples peleas con Sandra, su esposa. Sus obligaciones, las largas horas en el trabajo hacían que cada día se abriera un abismo entre él y ella. Desde hacía meses atrás, pasaban pocas horas juntos, y cuando lograban reunirse, cualquier cosa hacía que riñeran. De hecho, Sandra había hablado de divorciarse, pero él le había recordado que estaba Sarita, la hija de ambos, de 5 años. Con esa excusa, habían logrado mantener a raya el conflicto.

Ese recuerdo, hizo que Esteban buscara con la mirada al niño que venía con la pareja que discutía. El niño se había tirado en el pasillo y hacía un dibujo. Esteban lo vio con curiosidad porque el niño parecía estar entretenido haciendo algunos trazos.
─¿Qué haces? –preguntó Esteban intentando que el niño no escuchara a sus padres.
─Estoy haciendo un barco y el mar –respondió el niño sonriente sacando unos creyones de su caja de cartón. Los colores estaban gastados y tenían la punta gruesa, tal vez de tantos dibujos, de tanto uso.
─¿Te gustan los barcos y el mar? ¿Conoces el mar? –preguntó Esteban intentando parecer entusiasmado.
─Nunca he visitado el mar, pero mi papá me dijo que me llevaría. Cuando sea grande seré un pirata y voy a viajar en un barco por todo el mundo –apuntó el niño mientras dibujaba con el amarillo un sol sonriente.

Al lado de Esteban, la pareja seguía discutiendo. Él estuvo tentado a recriminarle, hacerles ver que cerca de ellos estaba el niño y que tal vez podría escucharlos, pero no se sintió con moral para hacerlo. Sandra y él habían discutido tanto, en cualquier parte, por cualquier cosa, que en ese instante Esteban se estaba preguntando si alguna vez Sarita lo habría escuchado. Le dio mucha tristeza pensar que su hija los hubiese escuchado discutir.

─¿El mar de qué color es? -preguntó el niño de repente sacando a Esteban de sus pensamientos.

─Azul. Pero de varios tonos de azules: claros, oscuros, intensos –explicó Esteban, pero el niño lo miró como si no lo entendiera. Luego tomó su caja de creyones y sacó dos lápices de colores azules.
─Solo tengo estos dos. ¿Cuál utilizo? ¿El del cielo? –preguntó el niño con los colores en las manitas.
─Sí, usa el del cielo –señaló Esteban con una sonrisa. El niño comenzó a rellenar toda la parte baja de la página con azul. Las líneas iban y venía, también círculos y a medida que el color cobraba espacio, el rostro del niño se iba iluminando. Cuando terminó con el mar, empezó a colorear la parte alta de la hoja intentando no estropear el sol sonriente que ya antes había dibujado.
Al finalizar de colorear, el niño le enseñó a Esteban su dibujo con orgullo.
─¡Está perfecto! –exclamó Esteban con alegría. El niño se levantó con el dibujo en la mano y fue a donde estaban sus padres a enseñárselo. El hombre y la mujer lo aplaudieron y lo abrazaron, también lo felicitaron por lo que había hecho. Esteban vio cómo el hombre se sentaba en su regazo al niño y sonreía escuchándolo. En ese momento, por lo visto, el hombre y la mujer habían terminado de discutir.

Esteban suspiró y miró la hora: el tiempo había volado y ya estaban a punto de llegar a su destino. Llegaría a tiempo a la reunión, pero ahora Esteban pensaba qué tan prudente sería viajar tanto. Tal vez él y Sandra deberían encontrarse más, compartir más, discutir menos. Mientras bajaba del tren y miraba a la pareja con su niño, pensó que tendría que hablar con Sandra y que a Sarita le compraría una caja de creyones para que dibujara mares y cielos azules, con soles sonrientes todos los días.























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One thing I like about kids is that even in the storm, they still manage to see the beauty in things. The child must have been affected by his parents argument but this somehow didn't reflect on his perspective or dream.

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I believe that if we do not harm the child, we will make a strong and good adult. Greetings

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If we can keep it real around children, growing up in love would make them lovely adults. Lovely story.

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I agree with you. Only by educating good children, we will have good adults. Greetings

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This was a lovely piece with a nice character arc. Your MC gains more insights into his own family than he expected to on his business trip. An enjoyable read.

When you translate your pieces, perhaps consider using the generally accepted practice in English writing of using speech marks for dialogue ie: " ".

Thank you for writing in The Ink Well.

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Thank you for your comment and suggestion. I will put it into practice. Regards

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