RE: My landlady
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The end of your piece is startling, @lightpen. It surely must have been hard for the landlady to understand graciousness, given her generally negative and selfish behavior toward people. You describe this character well. You don't tell us that she is selfish and unkind. You offer evidence: locking the gate, spying on you, demanding payment for something she should pay for.
The arc here is strong, and the scene descriptions powerful enough to keep our interest.
Thank you for sharing this experience with us, @lightpen.
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@theinkwell. Thank you very much for the detailed review. I hold your response in high esteem. It is a great motivation for me.