I saw the heavens

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Slowly a young man worked his way through the brush and young trees that had grown up through the cracked foundation of a dilapidated house. It's been six years since he last visited this haunted house, but his Job as a detective demands of him today. Cobwebs filled the openings where windows had once been and hornet's nests clung to the scorched beams of the floor above. A partially burned-out staircase hovered in the corner and a broken oil lamp lay dashed on the first step. Littered on the floor were years of dirt and debris. The young man halted at the base of the staircase, a pool of blood flowed through the stairs. He could easily tell the murder had happened not long ago. He became alert, suddenly his knees grew weak as he walked gently through the staircase, putting his foot slowly on the ground to avoid a noise."I hate this place" he mumbled under his breath when he took the last staircase. For years he had tried to avoid this place, not until recently when his department had called him and put him in charge of a murder case in the building.

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He stood at the end of a long room that appeared to have once been a tennis court. Broken bars and twisted metal littered the floor, here and there scraps of material waved in the breeze that blew through the paneless windows. Turning to his left, the young man discovered a long hallway from which the blood flowed. He followed the trace and saw a lifeless body lying in a pool of blood. He rolled the man over but couldn't discover where the blood flows. His eyes bewildered watching the lifeless body that had no injury on it but yet he bleeds. Fear gripped him, he turned back to leave when he heard movements behind him. He turned around and saw the man who had been lifeless a few minutes ago alive and standing before him.
"I saw the heavens," the man uttered. The detective stood there unable to speak, his legs shaking. ",I saw the heavens," he repeated.
".... Ummm... What does it look like?" The detective managed to ask.
"It's something that is beyond explanation, come let me show you " he waved his hand and nodded his head in the direction he wanted him to follow. Like a zombie the detective followed, afraid of what lay ahead. Moving cautiously around the broken boards on the floor, the detective moved toward the hint of light. As he approached a blackened wall, he realized the man ahead of him was a zombie. Just before he could run , the doorknob turned revealing more of his kind as they approached him. The detective retraced his steps, but before he could go further he felt a grip on his wrist, and before him were a group of zombies approaching him.
"I saw the heavens, but fear not, as one of us you'll live forever" The zombie said as he approached his direction gnashing his teeth. Just before he got bitten, a ray of light pierced through a cracked wall. The zombies quickly retraced their steps and found a place to hide. The detective saw a saving route, he broke open the wall, now that he knew what burns them, immortally will no longer be theirs.


This is in response to the Hive Naija contest. Everyone is welcome to participate

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His mission on the building was a dangerous one, it nice the light came out and the zombies retreat, if not, he would have been bitten, there is no point of him trying to fight, now the light has saved him, he should just go away before they came after him again.

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I believe he'll be wise to do just this

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Yeah, he needs to, that would be a nice thing for him to do.

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First of all, did you intentionally write it together with no paragraph or it was a mistake?

Wahala for this detective o, even after seeing that the man bleeding had no injury, he was still there?
Hah! Brave man of the year..

This was really interesting

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Knowing I have a word count, it stresses me to write with paragraphs.

To write fast , I don't observe paragraph and for the detective, his curiosity led him this far. I would have done the same, I always like to know 😊

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Without paragraphs, it’s actually difficult to read.
You get lost in the sentences and have to find where you were

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I understand. For your sake I'll make adjustments 🥳🥳

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