RE: Love is all that matters

hello @chuksmeezy, thank you for supporting other members of the community. That is always so lovely to see :-) Your piece was nicely conceived and evidenced some good writing and overall story structure. I am going to leave some specific feedback to guide you toward improvement as I like your writing style and ethic. I hope you take it in the spirit in which it is shared. Your piece would have benefited from an edit in Grammarly to pick up issues with punctuation and some unusual word choices eg: the use of 'wade' over 'fade' or the use of few instead of short in "A uniformed police man gestured with his hands just a few distance ahead of his lexus car." The sentence construction of "I'm literally killing myself over here trying to o convince my both parents about you," would be better presented as: "I'm literally killing myself trying to convince my parents about you." There are a few other factual examples that make us pause. Jenny is in California but later referred to as British. While this is quite feasible, there is insufficient clarity (even Dike's dad asks for clarification but doesn't get any) and no point mentioning that she is in California unless it adds to the plot and moves the story forward. It becomes an unnecessary distraction as the reader tucks the Californian fact away inside their head and then keeps wondering when its importance will emerge. When Dike's dad sees him, you write: "His Dad swiftly shifted his gaze from the ludo board to his only child, who stood a few centimetres away, directly in front of the entrance." If Dike was only a few centimetres away this would imply that they were almost touching. I think you meant a few metres away. It is important to proofread to ensure that the entire story hangs together sensibly. Overall, though I enjoyed this piece, I think a little more attention to detail would elevate it substantially.