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RE: Meditating by the lake with my daughter
Looking at the photos and reading your post, I can feel the serenity of the moment, and the happiness of quiet time spent with your daughter.
I like your poem. The simple, one syllable words of the first two lines are nicely balanced, with eight syllables each, and similar structure. Then there is the slight disruption of those jumping fish - only seven syllables in that line - and then the "quiet" (two syllables) of the last line, borrowing a syllable from line three to restore harmony. Very nicely done!
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thanks for the comment of my poem. actually I teach bahasa Indonesia. In Bahasa there is an old peom called pantun that user ruled sounds , I try in English but it is difficult
That is interesting. I just looked up pantun - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pantun - and learnt that there are two parts, "pembayang" or "sampiran" and "maksud," so perhaps there is more to your statement that, "The beauty and peace are double faces of a coin" than I realized at first.
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