Post Traumatic Smile Disorder

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I smiled and all my teeth fell out, some of them rolled into a plate of metal with small holes blocking the sewers. I gathered what I could of them and put them back in place with glue to barely stick them into my mouth. But, I didn't organize them well and the wisdom tooth became the front tooth. However, it wasn't important.

I smiled again, celebrating what I achieved but they fell once more. This time, they all disappeared in the sewage. Without hesitation, I lifted the metal plate and went down the dirt ladder, it smelled horrible.

When I reached the bottom, it got very dark except for a dying light coming from the hole above. I started looking for my teeth and I only found two or three, so I had to go deeper and deeper. I touched the dirty ground hoping to find something but in the end, I gave up and went back.

I went home and laid on the bed. I had a dream where I turn into a big wisdom tooth with a mouth. The tooth's mouth is made out of me, my body parts. It smiled and I watched my body parts fall down on the floor. They started shaking like they had epilepsy.

I didn't move to pick them up. I was watching my bodies without a reaction, not even a minimum one. No reaction except for the disturbing feelings I had from watching this strange scene.

It kept happening until all my bodies died.

I woke up panicking and started feeling my body parts to see if my body parts are still intact or whether I actually turned into a big wisdom tooth. Then I felt my teeth with my tongue and found them in place.

I almost smiled out of happiness, but I was scared. Ever since that night, I haven't smiled.



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I love your PTSD better than the real one. You combined humor and horro well. Thanks for sharing.

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ACK! The first sentence did me in. I have a teeth thing. Good gravy and apple mint flavored toothpaste NO!

I'm gonna go brush my teeth now...

!CTP

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Yoyo @amirtheawesome1 !!

Nice concept with decent execution. 👍 I love abstract, dream sequence type pieces like this one. It even had that mythological feel to it, like it's a tale of old warning of... (?) That's the thing, it doesn't have a concrete message, a moral (or, I'm too stupid to see it). At any rate, abstract pieces like this need to have an underlying point in order to stick the landing. A meaning behind the madness, as it were. I, personally, didn't find one here.

You inspired me in some ways however. And your creativity never left me bored. It's just not executed to its fullest potential IMO.

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EDIT:
< center > TEXT/IMAGE URL/WHATEVER < /center > without the spaces of course, to place your shit in the center of the page i.e. your book cover.

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This series as a whole is more feelings-based than plot-driven. I don't really like breaking these down as I prefer each person to take what they feel out of it. But, think trauma, phobia, or a mixture of both and you might find that meaning.

I would move it to center but I reserve that for another series titled "Horribly written diaries" which is more poetry/prose based.

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Allow me elaborate further. When I say meaning, it refers to purpose. Your stories need to have an underling why (I mean they don't have to have anything, but we're trying to get better here). Traume/phobia are not meanings, they're themes. Thematically you nailed it, but that's not what we're talking about here.

Adding meaning to your work is difficult, frankly it's the hardest thing to do IMO. However, when you write something abstract, if it doesn't have a purpose, it just falls flat. As it stands, it's a horror magazine side-show piece - I'm saying take this horror magazine piece and publish it on its own, put that bitch in the New York Times bestseller's.

So remember, if the word meaning confuses you, try thinking of it as purpose.

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