You said you needed proof,
So I bit my middle finger as hard as I could,
But from your countenance, I could truly see,
That you weren't moved,
So I went for a bigger wound
And I hope you'd be truly moved.
A courage I saw it to be, but stupidity it must be,
I was in love, blinded and filled with lust,
That I didn't truly see I was lost,
In a wilderness of craze and mental rust,
I didn't even think twice or blinked at all,
As I laid down my all.
The pain in my finger should've been the clue,
But my eyes were already glued,
To your perfection and your godlike look,
That I missed an expensive clue,
Of your not wanting me even if I was a pretty flu,
So I ended up as a fool,
And the gate of hell opened up to me like a big room.
I wanted to scream high and whine,
But I was already lost to life,
Now, I have come to understand my fault,
I shouldn't have stabbed my heart at all,
I shouldn't have hurt myself but run,
Because from the onset, I was never yours.
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Dijiste que necesitabas pruebas,
Así que me mordí el dedo corazón tan fuerte como pude,
Pero por tu semblante, realmente pude ver,
que no estabas conmovido,
Así que fui por una herida más grande
Y espero que estés realmente conmovido.
Un coraje vi que era, Pero estupidez debe ser,
Estaba enamorado, cegado y lleno de lujuria,
Que no vi verdaderamente que estaba perdido,
En un desierto de locura y herrumbre mental,
Ni siquiera lo pensé dos veces o parpadeé en absoluto,
Mientras lo dejaba todo.
El dolor en mi dedo debería haber sido la pista,
Pero mis ojos ya estaban pegados,
A tu perfección y tu mirada divina,
Que me perdí una pista cara,
De que no me querías aunque fuera una linda gripe,
Así que terminé como un tonto,
Y la puerta del infierno se me abrió Como una gran habitación.
Quise gritar alto y quejarme,
Pero ya estaba perdido para la vida,
Ahora, he llegado a comprender mi culpa,
No debería haber apuñalado mi corazón en absoluto,
No debería haberme hecho daño, sino correr,
Porque desde el principio, nunca fui tuya.
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Still yours truly,
Balikis.
Thanks for reading.
Peace be unto those who crave it and more to those who chase it away.
Thank you.
You're welcome! 😀
I found your poem to be well structured. It starts off very strong with the finger bite. It moves the reader then from infatuation to realisation. I especially liked the line 'I was in love, blinded and filled with lust,' which I think will resonate with anyone who's been there.
Thank you for the poem analysis. I am glad you enjoyed reading.
Yes, the love part is very relatable. Thanks for reading.