RE: LA Modern Noir: Chapter 6b - Wilson

Hmmmm

There are som few mistakes...
Lack of comma's and shit.
Plus the shop owner, you first addressed the person as her, then you addressed as a him.

Also, thought Xavier wasn't around anymore judging from the past chapter.
Did he come back or is this timed before the last chapter?

I feel you should include dates or vague time specification.

"Three Months Ago." Versus the original present...